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Question: All right, I tried it again! Does my Phoenix Trigee Work!?
Phoenix Trigee
by Elaine Polin

The robot, Phoenix………!.joking with poets he
digs through the dust……!.!.laughs at the scientists
searching for life………!.!.…speaks to the heart
on a real, virtual world!.!.!.!.!.!.!.of those reaching for Mars!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Kewl, you have effectively re-programmed Phoenix to interact with us on mars!. Beautiful trigee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You've managed to put the right pieces in place in complementary fashion, with words as fluid as silk!. You smudged the colors of your palette and created something unique!.!.!. red and yellow became orange!.!.!. energy, happiness, joy, sunshine!.!.!. how unique you are, as are the things of which you write!.!.!. well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i am a novice in the poetry field but i do like it!. i was not familiar with 'trigee' but i get it! nice! it is almost like a haiku, it condenses feeling into a few words!. good job!-blureyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Excellent Trigee! May I suggest some economy of words that might sharpen it!?

Robot Phoenix!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.joking with poets
Digs through dust!.!.!.!.!.he laughs at scientists
Searching for life!.!.!.!.!.!.speaks to the heart
On a virtual world!.!.!.!.!.!.of those who reach for Mars!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Earth to Elaine!.!.!. It's perfect!
Earth to Phoenix!.!.!. Tell Elaine she done good!
Wonderful Trigee!.!.!. all smooth verses!.
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Fabulous daaaa'ling, simply fabulous!Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Hi!",
That is a very well (OUT OF THIS WORLD TRIGEE) : )

WELL DONE!
Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

You rock!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like Mars,
bars
great dives
lots of jives
trigees too
singing true!

Very nice!.
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Yes it does!. It's excellent!

I especially like the scientist phrases!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It works, it works!

(Wonder if 'they' know we're up there!?)Www@QuestionHome@Com