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Question: Short poem!? How would my girlfriend like it!?
This one I did personally, took me a little while to do because I was trying to get a good feel to it, how is it!?

You're Voluptuous
Sweet caramel brown honeydew
Satin skin smooth to the touch
Angelic and energetic
Using sex as a weapon
So as I remember the day we met
I hope I will never forget


Pretty short =)Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ryan,
I am sure she will love this poem
you wrote
You did it from the heart
Angelic and energetic
I love this part
along with the caramel!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely sensuous praise, but spoiled by that "sex as a weapon" line!.
It's too harsh and cynical an idea to fit happily with the rest of the poem, imho!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its great!.
it will make her feel better!.
she'll prob think you love her for what she is!.
setting the side the sex
goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its alright but it comes off that you only like her because she's good at sex!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's ok - If you're in a good relationship I'm sure she'll enjoy getting a love letter!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

its cute!. i like it!. =]Www@QuestionHome@Com