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Question: Pliz read and critique my poem ' he spoke'
He spoke in a language I didn’t understand
He spoke and I felt the pain
He spoke about how he was like me once
He spoke referring to my skin health and state of mind
He spoke about a girl he once loved
He spoke with such affection
He spoke with such depth
He spoke and suddenly tears fell
He spoke his voice pregnant with hate
He spoke even in silence - not a word said
He spoke of an enemy
He spoke of stealth
He spoke, I felt so scared
He spoke to me no more
He spoke his last words
He spoke so I speak so we speak
He spoke about AIDS!.
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i thought it was good the he spoke part on every line made it very affective i dont get why u talked about AIDS in the last line was that what the whole poem about sorry i am a little slow
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I like it, but honestly after the fourth "he spoke" I just omitted them and read the interesting parts!.
How about he spoke 'of' AIDS instead of about!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's a very deep and sad poem:( i think it's very good, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very boring - too repetitive!. The AIDS bit just ruins it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com