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Question: Need advice, please be honest!. What do u think of this poem for school!?
I am in 8th grade!. Dont steal it!. Opinion please!.

I am a simple girl with great ambitions!.
I wonder if this will stop!.
I hear screams!.
I see terror!.
I want equality!.
I am trapped!.

I pretend that everything is okay!.
I feel darkness!.
I touch !.
I worry it won’t be all right !.
I cry beacause I can’t stop!.
I am waiting!.

I understand the horror!.
I try to stay strong!.
I dream of freedom!.
I say to have faith!.
I hope of peace!.
I am Anne Frank!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
"I pretend that everything is okay!.
I feel darkness!.
I touch *but cannot feel* !? just a suggestion lol
I worry it won’t be all right !.
I cry beacause I can’t stop!.
I am waiting!."

Really nice poem - never read the Anne Frank book but I know a lot about her!. Hope you get the "A" you deserve!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its nice but add a little more rythem to it!.!.!.!.more ryme like I pretend to be that is ok I feel darkness either way, I feel as if I sufficate, life for me wasnt always this way, I was born in a family everyday to await!. Classical drama, ended up in hate chanses for me to survive wasnt supposed to be fate!. claim the war clame the wrong all I ve got left is a rythem to a song!.!.!.concentration camps all around whips and crys were all the sound!. Death was arriving but I stood tall could hol no longer but I still held all!.!.!.!.IDK something like thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

School out!.

P!.S look at this poem i made

I am a simple girl with great ambitions!.
I wonder if this will stop!.
I hear screams!.
I see terror!.
I want equality!.
I am trapped!.

I pretend that everything is okay!.
I feel darkness!.
I touch !.
I worry it won’t be all right !.
I cry beacause I can’t stop!.
I am waiting!.

I understand the horror!.
I try to stay strong!.
I dream of freedom!.
I say to have faith!.
I hope of peace!.
I am Anne Frank!.
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i didnt understand it until the last line (i was like is this person really confused!?) and then it hit me!. i love it and i think its brilliant for someone your age!. its good!. its really really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know that much about poetry but it sounded good to me!. I like how it was subtle but still made sense!. Couldn't tell it was about Anne Frank until the end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very descriptive!. I can feel the emotions!. I think it's wonderful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

omg its so great bc you dont reallyl understand whats going on til the last line its wonder dont change anything at all "i touch but cannot feel"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great!. The "eye's" have it, and It's all about you!. <}:-})Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's corny!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it was ok not the best, if all that means about anne frank its on the right pathWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
May be try
I touch endlessness
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ITS GOOD BUT IT SEEMS LIKE YOU HAVE PROBLEMS LIKE FEELING OKWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its really good if its not supposed to rhyme!.

I touch your arm
A Hologram
Are you Still there!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

itouch should be i make a move

i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it but your teacher is the ultimate judgeWww@QuestionHome@Com

its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com