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Question: Any feedback on a poem!?
When all is well she is never noticed,
When there is light she is overshadowed,
Only when stained by the dark
Her true beauty is shown
She sacrificed living pure to illuminate the unknown
Ostracized, her soliloquy diminishes our fear
Living only to as a tool to be used
Dying only to be resurrected
To bring forth a greater light
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
last line is shoved in just for the heck of gimmick!.
first two lines have no parallelism and thus, don't fit well!.
(light/shadow does not equate to well/notice)
fourth line is generic
fifth line can be worded better
sixth line, clearly just doesnt make sense
seventh line, is generic
eighth line is very very generic
nineth line is somewhat religious =D
last line is whatever i said before

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