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Question: A tribute poem, your comments please!?
Ideal Man

There is magic in his eyes
And music in his heart
His mind will brook no lies
His soul is rich in art!.

He dances as he walks
Laughs so you can join
Shows interest when he talks
Trades with no base coin!.

At work he's diligent
Quick to promote others
In all ways tolerant
Treats all men as brothers!.

He listens, nor hastening
To fill the silence
Children and animals hearkening
Easily grant him the same audience!.

He'll share another's sorrows
Easily lends, but seldom borrows
Careful of the day
He's swift to repay!.

Tho' women are drawn to him
He's faithful to but one
His passion's not a whim
No trespass will be done!.

? March 30, 2008 Albrt K!. Jungers All rights reserved

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
A wonderful tribute to your son-in-law!. Your daughter has chosen well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good choice of words, clear and precise except for::

'trades with no base coin' and 'hearkening'(archaic!?)!.

A tribute with simple and easily-understood expressions would ensure uninterrupted and more complete appreciation - brings on deeper emotions!. A well-composed one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its pretty good!.
you made this youreself!?Www@QuestionHome@Com