Is this a good poem? Be honest

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Question:

You made me think I loved you
And you pretended to care
Just long enough to make me think
You would always be there

Now I see how foolish I was
To put so much trust in you
All because you made me think
That I was in love with you

Love is a funny thing
But I guess you'll never know
Because it is something
You don't know how to show

So don't say you're sorry
And tell me not to cry
Because now I know
Everything you say is a lie

(Please feel free to give me suggestions)
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

(here is my rewrite of this poem) (and i like it)

I took your heart
made it feel special
now i find out
your heart ignored mine
and created an illusion
for me to enjoy

i saw you lip locking
with some other girl
thought you could have two
well I say, F U

you nailed me
and it pierced my soul
but now I know
Your just another a$$ hole

trying to play your games
think you own us
just like to think your cool
but why should you get by

you hurt me
and expected me not to cry
i wish to run from you
so you can never tell me another lie

so don't call back
don't apologize
just take your things
and get from in front of my eyes

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Your poem has the same theme that love forsaken poets write with!. I agree with the top answer, it is completely generic!. The problem with your poem is that you didn't enlighten anyone!. I read poems like this all the time!. Basic rhymes about lost love!. To really be a greater writer, you have to use metaphor's, similes, and the like!. People love it when you use those!.
You also have to add abstraction!.

Example your first line is not dull, but not very original!.
Instead of what you wrote, you should be writing something like this,

The thoughts that made me love you were all just make-believe!.
The lies you told, made me trust you, to a point where the real truth could not be seen!.

In this I used better adjectives, which just means better descriptions, and used the lies as an invisible veil metaphor!.
My advice to you is that you keep writing!. You have the potential I once had, now you have to craft into talent!.
This poem is good, but not an "let's all read it poem!"
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The rhyme scheme is disjointed, and the meter is choppy, inconsistent and extremely awkward!. The diction needs a lot of improvement: it's cliche and hackneyed!. The syntax needs variation!. In short, this sounds like a sixth grader wrote it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty generic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think its great
it needs a meaningful title tho
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