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Question: How do you think this sounds!.!.!.!.
can someone help me in grammar, I want to dedicate something to a friend on a frame and these words I want to use!.!.!.!.!.any good!.!.!.suggestions!.!.!.!.I'm naming a star!.!.!.!.

For the kindness you have shown me, the laughs we have shared and patitience you have had on my flaws, I truly believe you deserve much more than a star!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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For the kindness you have shown me, the laughs we have shared, and the patience you have had with my flaws, I truly believe you deserve much more than a star!.

Hope they like your gift!. Have a happy day, and I send you a virtual gummy bear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Instead of "patience (note your spelling) you have had on my flaws", how about this: "your patience with my flaws!.!.!." or "your patience with me!.!.!.!." Sounds less choppy!.

Maybe something to the effect of "you are the real star!."

Good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree with Cookie on this one!Www@QuestionHome@Com