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Question: Is this poem pretty good!?
i sit here waiting!.
to find where you are
i've searched forever
i've looked near and far

i see your face when i wake up
and smell your scent through the day
i hear you voice at night
when im crying and i'm not okay!.



i can feel you near me
even though theres no one there
i can feel you hold me
even though theres no one to care

i smile at your face
i cry when your memory fades
i laugh when i hear you joke
though i hide my emotions behind the shades

i cannot sleep
without you here
i cannot live
without you to care

even though i've been without you
and it seems like i can't go on
i'll just put on that fake smile
and remember theres darkness before the dawn!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This poem reads with a soft voice, like a child's whisper, but the emotions are blunt, straight forward, deep, and crimson with despair!.
You took the over-used, cliche, of longing for the lover who momentary leaves and brought a new-glory and originality to it!.

Stanza 5 line 4 should be,
"with out your care!." Sounds better!.
And where is the punctation, miss!?
I give this poem a
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first the bad and then the good!.

everything up until the last line has been said before in a poem or a song!.

the good, Everything on this earth has been done before, felt before, or experienced before!.!.!.!.!. therefore the emotions that brought forth these words can search deeper to find the feelings and describe them in another way whether by metaphor or just true gritty expression!. i believe you can dig deeper to express this message and turn out an excellent poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

I really really like it!. I think the presentation is really good!. Isn't much I would say to make it better!. I think it is just beautiful the way it is! = )

Would you mind checking out a few of mine!? Please!?

http://www!.authspot!.com/Poetry/Youll-Nev!.!.!.

http://www!.authspot!.com/Poetry/Just-Brea!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

nah its like this poem i wrote back in 6th grade, almost i dentical, anyways its very amature!. sleezy, but keep tryingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiul and obviously heartfelt!. What does not kill you makes you stronger!. Peace!Www@QuestionHome@Com