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Question: A rewritten, reposting of an old poem of mine!. What do you think of it
TD - don't read it (you saw the old version - and it hasn't changed much)
In the style of Robert Herrick's -
To the Virgins - To Make Much of Time
Make haste to frolic in the hay
Sunkissed and sweetly singing!.
Ye cannot ignore the passing hours
And what fate may be bringing
As swift the orb its voyage makes
From east to welcoming west
Thus life will its brief journey take
Twixt birth and eternal rest!.
The morrow's but a breath away
Casting shadows on thy face!.
Hence must ye fill each enchanted day
Before life moves on apace!.
Steal kisses now, beneath the bough
Whilst lips are pure and sweet
Banish sombre furrows from thy brow
And encircling sorrows cheat!.
Young men will ne'er a maiden spurn
And may buxom matrons kiss!.
Yet this lesson ye must learn
Wrinkled crones he'll surely miss!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Granny, you have now identified yourself as part of that conspiracy you so feared, and I could not be more delighted!.
When up the thyrse is raised, and when the sound
Of sacred orgies flies -- a round, a round!
When the rose reigns, and locks with ointments shine,
Let rigid Cato read these lines of thine!.
Thank you for reminding me of Herrick, and thank you for this verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it! If there were so many "carpe diem" poems then, it was because people had an acute sense of time passing, while nowadays, especially with the Internet, everything is on the same level and many people have lost the sense of history!. Ah well, I am talking like a wrinkled crone, while I would much rather be a "buxom matron"!
"Ye cannot scape"!? Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love this one, missed the 1st!. I am not qualified to offer critique, but I do like 'escape' better!.
I fall somewhere between young and old, and never was I buxom, but I love the message!
Thank you Granny!.
Did you notice your question does not contain a question mark!? What the!.!.!.!.!.!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Let's better say for some ones:
Not only bitches perform you in stiches!.
Everybody is full of their own, aren't they!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
OK, I didn't read it, especially the part about the buxom matrons!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's kind of sad!. Makes me fear getting older even more!.!.!.But I think the point of it is to tell people not to take time and youth for granted!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I also saw the old version!. Both were/are superb, as usual!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is pleasing to read, and pleasing to hear!. What more could I ask of a poem!? Well done GJ!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I read the first verse and then dozed off!. Here's one for you:
There was a young lady from Ealing
Who had a peculiar feeling!.
She lay on her back
Opened her crack
And pissed all over the ceiling!.
Now that's what I call poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com