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Question: Which do you like better of my poems, Two Versions!
This is the first one, i attempted to fix up,

You didnt just break my heart,
You didnt just tear it apart,
You rippped it up in little peices
and put it through despair,
But most of all, you killed it
Its unfixable, its unreplaceable
just face it, its over
-or-

You didnt just break my heart,
You didnt just tear it apart,
You rippped it up in little peices
and put it through despair,
still unaware if you loved me or not, (thats as far as i got)

Any tips, words or lines i can use, ANYTHING please anything helps :)
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like the flow of the second one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is too short, it is like you just started and then there was an interruption for commercials!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like the ending to the second one!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com