You didnt just break my heart,
You didnt just tear it apart,
You rippped it up in little peices
and put it through despair,
But most of all, you killed it
Its unfixable, its unreplaceable
just face it, its over
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You didnt just tear it apart, You rippped it up in little peices and put it through despair, But most of all, you killed it Its unfixable, its unreplaceable just face it, its over Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I loved the first four lines, but you kind of lost the rhythm and feel of the poem after that!. I think you would write a lot better if you tried to rhyme it!. I'd also advise you to fix your last line!. Somehow, it doesn't seem as serious as the first lines and kind of dampens the whole point of the poem!. But overall, good job!. =DWww@QuestionHome@Com you didn't just break my heart, no, you shredded it into a million microscopic pieces, and like Humpty Humpty, my heart can not be put back together!. Www@QuestionHome@Com the last line doesn't fit!. otherwise it's goodWww@QuestionHome@Com |