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Position:Home>Poetry> " LIKE ICE ", a poem as I grieveQuestion: " LIKE ICE ", a poem as I grieve The words hung like icicles!. Cold, pointed, poised, dripping ice and cold in that frozen worthless sun shine!. drip drop my soul, my thought drip drop into that one time frozen and quiet for once- don't move me, don't come near- Let me melt away Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I really appreciate your more minimalist take!. Thank you!. I love your line break on frozen I also like the idea of frozen worthless sun!.Www@QuestionHome@Com At the risk of giving offense where none at all is intended!. Here is what makes sense to me!. The visual balance is enhanced with this slight change!. I could see this printed with a background of misty winter trees!. Cold, pointed, poised, dripping ice and cold that frozen worthless sun!. drip drop my soul, my thought drip drop into time frozen, quiet drip drop for once, don't move me, don't come near, let me melt away!. Www@QuestionHome@Com very nice!. You submit your stuff at http://www!.coldcoldlaw!.com You can write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like that poem! awh don't grieve!!Www@QuestionHome@Com |