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Question: From among my poems, a homey one, your comments!?
The Cast Iron Skillet


The old iron skillet
Has seen many meals
And the older it gets
The better it feels
In over a century
It has often grown crust
After some washings
Shown occasional rust
But brought back to use
Being patiently seasoned
Has withstood abuse
Its surface well blackened
Polished smooth and non-sticking
By alternate cooking
Cleansing with salt
Used hot for cold meat
Simmered beans
on low constant heat
Used for deep frying
Then for baking cornbread
Without even trying
to a smooth polish lead
Marriage s a cast iron pan
Well seasoned in constant use
It improves with age
Relation of woman and man
With good use and correction
Lasts generation to generation
A little bit of salt,
a bit of sugar and butter
Gives meaning to life
and keeps folks together!.
? February 10, 2008, Albert K!. jungers!. All Rights Reaerved

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Nothin' sez lovin' like cornbread in the oven!

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I like it!.
How is this poem that i wrote (I was sad at the time):

SHATTERED DREAMS
The full moon shines like a searchlight,
searching searching for her sunshine!.
The stars gleam and shimmer
like ancient shards of dreams and peace
fractured by the cruel world of humanity!.
A siren sounds in the distance,
the sound of glass shattering pierced my ears,
the unavoidable truth melting my heart and soul
and burning like cold iron!.
The world spins,
Pandora's box opens,
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That was great!. Your words can describe a scene so well, and the imagery was beautiful!. I'm lucky to have found a poem like this!

From the first few sentences, readers can tell that you have very deep thinking and in a way, your poem can relate to everbody's lives which is what makes it so special!.

My only advice is to tell you to relax a little!. From your words, it seems as if you had tried too hard!. I think you should just let the flow of your poem lead you!.

Awesome job! Loved your poem!. =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its a vauge comparison between a skillet and a marriage!. It speaks to discreatly about the skillet leaving the reader no imagination!. Vocab is rather lacking as well!. Check out Fairchild!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I thought the first part was excellent, but then you go into a completely different direction!. The change was too abrupt for me, you need to smooth it out!. Overall it is good, though!. You should submit it at http://www!.coldcoldalw!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com

has a good texture to it (lots of imagry, especially gustatory), but the rhyme seems forced, and it distracts the flow of the poem!. Try more natural lines, they don't have to rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its well written but it is too long and kinda just slapped together keep it short i even noticed u can make it two pemsWww@QuestionHome@Com

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