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Question: Do any of these sound okay!?
What the future might hold!.
Hey you, "troublemaker"!. You come back at the wrong time i'd say!.
Trying to bring your drama here, I can already tell that for sure!. I'm just letting
you know now!. I don't care what you have to say or any of your thoughts
about something!. Don't bother me with your nagging or your beliefs!.
To tell you the truth, I don't want to hear a word you have to say!.


If you look at something closely!.!.!.!.!.
you begin to realize things that you havn't ever noticed before!.
Something small, that hadn't much meaning, has so much more significance!.
A closer look upon things can go a far way from what it appears to be!.



Was it what you said that had me thinking!?
If you can make someone change their mind, there was
always a dab of doubt lingering!.



It's all just another trend!.
The light sparkles so everyone goes to it because it's shiny!.
Hell, since everyones going to it why shouldn't we go to it
since every else is!?


Who knew your actions tell something!.
Passing by so fast the dotted lines conjoin into one!.
Looking up at the sun!. It hurts to look up to something
so much higher and brighter than what you can handle!.
Brings my head to downward stare!. I swear i'm not sad, I just hope alot!.

The "slick" ones!.
You act inocent and oblivious to your doings!.
I know you know what your doing!. Don't think your
fooling anyone!. It's almost like acid burning my eyes!.
I can't bear to witness any of your actions!. Stop
making those excuses, your not fooling anyone!.


The "I don't care mood,"
When you stop caring it's almost like a drug
easing slowly into your body!. You know it will
only last awhile for many a times before you have
delt with this feeling!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
1!.no- its not saying much
2!. sorta deep
3!.great concept
4!. great, but work on the last few words "since everybody else is" actually just leave it offf-- cause you already say it in the beginning of the sentence
5!. good, good, yes, good- but how about----im just hoping!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
6!. no- i don't care 4 this one-slick people do know what they r doin--- the acid is a little off track-- too deep --no not this one
7!. the first sentence is good--- I don't like the last sentence!. !.!.!.--that part is good-- "you know it will only last a while--"--- perhaps but you do it anyway---- or something like that-////// hey what about-!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.awhile but you don't care!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Two could go for poems!.!.!.For the others!.!.!.I guess you are thinking aloud!. But they are nice high thoughts I guess!. Philosophies!.!.!.
Peace!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its ok, could be better, but a good start, 6/10 i guessWww@QuestionHome@Com

it sounds all right!. but maybe fix it a bit!. explain more i guess!. more detailWww@QuestionHome@Com

It sound great!! You should be a poet!Www@QuestionHome@Com

tl;drWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thumbs up to all!!! :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

good deal, learn some more vocab thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

some of them do i guessWww@QuestionHome@Com

What are they supposed to be!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can't say I liked it!.
But i have no constructive critiscism to add!.Www@QuestionHome@Com