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Position:Home>Poetry> What think you all of this poem?Question: What think you all of this poem!? She has the keys to open me
Unlocking the bolt lock of my life She opens my door And enters me Making herself comfortable She puts things in place Straightens my rugs Puts away clutter Giving the old halls of my heart A "woman's touch" None of the secret rooms in me Are untouched by her She lives in me She is at home I am her house She has the keyWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This is so romantic and so evocative!. I absolutely love it!. I love the intimate, quaint depictions of "Giving the old halls of my heart!.!.!.A woman's touch"!. I also genuine openness of offering "all the secert rooms" in you!. But the last four lines are what really struck me as the heart and soul of the relationship!. They are a poem unto themselves!. This is one of my very favorites of yours!. It is lovely!. Thank you!. Www@QuestionHome@Com I think this poem is wonderful!. You've taken the "key to my heart" theme to a new extreme!. The "bolt lock" was a bit odd sounding, but better than "dead bolt" I guess!. That would sound too cold for such a warm poem!. So, I thought that showed you were definitely paying close attention to word choices!. (Either that or not everybody calls 'em dead bolts like they do 'round here!.) Another poem that leaves me in awe at how compassionate poets like you can be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I really like your poem!. The " Making herself comfortable' isn't really working for me though!. maybe the word comfortable isn't the word you should use!.!.!. And maybe putting the verbs as "putting things!.!.!., straightening , putting!.!. (actually no i think it's good like it is :D) and maybe changing comfortable with something like "at ease" , i think it "flows" more with the poem Hope it'll help you! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com Semper Fi Reborn, Fi, you're always kickin' it with the mad verses and poetic nuances! I can look at your work and say to myself, "Now this is a brother that has no problem expressing himself proper and coming correct on the subject matter as well!" And you always are upbeat and positive while most rappers dis the ladies, here you are within strong masculinity showing a softer, pleasant side!. It's like I like my steaks!.!.!.WELL DONE!! Grade AAA+++Www@QuestionHome@Com I really love this poem!. The idea and explanation of how you feel about this woman is very clever!. I think that you could build on it a little more!. Like use just a little more language and just twist the explanations a little bit!. Other than that, it's really good!. Nice jobWww@QuestionHome@Com This poem expresses the love of a woman for her man who openly and whole-heartedly accepts all that she has to offer!. Both give and receive simultaneously!. The two complete each other!. He is utterly content!. Www@QuestionHome@Com "None of the secret rooms in me are untouched by her" This is one of the best descriptions of true intimacy I have ever read!. Thank you for this wonderful poem of love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com If you aren't careful, you will in later life be as I and be called an overly romantic old coot!. But it ain't bad!.Poetry like this is easy to write when you love and are loved!. Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The heart is the home, where everything is safely and lovingly tended!. Thank you again for sharing your beautiful work!. <><Www@QuestionHome@Com This one makes me smile because it reminds me of something my husband said to me once!. Your love poems are always beautiful to read, and this one is no exception!Www@QuestionHome@Com Straightening rugs and putting away clutter of the heart leaves room for only love!. This is one of my favorites!Www@QuestionHome@Com Pretty nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com its indented prose, but if it means something to you, then thats good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com "Hi!", You are such a sweety! Great poem!. WELL DONE! Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com its great i love the part when you say she lives in me she is at home she has the keyWww@QuestionHome@Com I love your love poems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Cool!.!.!.when is she going to run the vacuum!?Www@QuestionHome@Com I love it!. Its great =]Www@QuestionHome@Com omg this is so good you are a geniousWww@QuestionHome@Com is she your girlfriend or the maid, for crying out loudWww@QuestionHome@Com |