"We are two different people, we have different lives,
different loves, different backgrounds!. But the only
thing we have in common is that we listen
to our hearts!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Position:Home>Poetry> Like my poem =]]]]]]]]Question: Like my poem =]]]]]]]] "We are two different people, we have different lives,
different loves, different backgrounds!. But the only thing we have in common is that we listen to our hearts!."Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i love it!!!!!!!!!!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com it's a good start, but you need to work with it more!. I think you could do a lot better with how you worded it, but the idea is really good!. instead, take your poetry camera out and take a picture of the two different people - what do they look like!? how are they different!? like you are taking a snapshot but you use words!.!. Then you describe their lives!.!. what is different about them!? what does that difference look like!? how are the loves different!? what does each love look like!? and on and on!. THEN you tie the "listen to our hearts" somehow as a common thread throughout the poem!.!. where you take your snapshot, and then another, but you tie the snapshots together using this common thread of "listen to our hearts" keep working on it and let me know what you come up with!. Www@QuestionHome@Com On a scale of 1-10, I'd give it a 2!. You're not supposed to start a sentence with "but!." How about "Two different lives lived by two different people!.!.!. umm open the church and see all the people!?!?" lolWww@QuestionHome@Com i dont know if its just the format, but it seems more like prose than poetry!. but its extremely well written none the less!. It seems like it could be a quote from a famous speech or a famous monologue from a book or playWww@QuestionHome@Com can i use that in a song:] haha! its amazing!! i wish it came out of my brain! ahahaWww@QuestionHome@Com Short, Simple, and to the point!. I like it!. Adding a little more may help, but it is a good start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com thats really great!!! it might be better adding a bit more but i still luv it! oh and u might not want 2 say but the only u should say the only!.Www@QuestionHome@Com niceeeeeeeeeeeeee=)Www@QuestionHome@Com that poem is not bad lol Www@QuestionHome@Com Er!.!.!. It sounds more like just a line of a poem, really!.Www@QuestionHome@Com wow thats very touching :)Www@QuestionHome@Com pretty good!.!.!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com its okayWww@QuestionHome@Com tres bienWww@QuestionHome@Com not bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's not bad for a free verse :)Www@QuestionHome@Com |