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Question: Have you ever really looked at the sky!?
The sky,
a master artists
pallet where aqua,
ultra blue, edged
with titanium white
are unified with spatula,
softened with number ten
brush of the finest bristle!.
Unformed clouds are born,
to be fluffed into metamorphic
balls of cotton wool!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I loved the theme of this piece, but felt the line breaks were like hitting a brick wall except for the last three lines!. also, I have to ask: is agua a color!? I've never run across it as a paint before!. And pallet makes me think of a pallet, not the canvas being described in the rest of the poem!. If I may make a suggestion:

The sky,
A master artist canvas,
Where Cerulean
And Ultramarine
Edged with Titanium,
Are unified by knife,
And softened
By the fine bristles
Of a No!. ten brush
Unformed clouds are born,
Fluffed into metamorphic
Balls of cotton wool!.

This is by no means an attempt on my part to rewrite your poem--it is purely meant as an example of what I thought might be a clearer version of what the poem said to me!.

To answer your question: Yes, I have seen the sky--and it is the hardest thing I've ever tried to paint!. For some reason I don't work with the blues very well!.

I hope I was of some help without sounding rude or obnoxious--if I came off sounding that way I apologize!.
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very well described!.Well in a way i have looked at the the sky in a way and the other no not really!.But i do believe the sky is all you say of it and it is neverending!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.LOL!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awesome poem!
really pretty!
quite odd!
but yea!
ive really looked at the sky!
but i live in the city and i cant see the stars at night!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A view of the sky from a poet's interpretation of an artist's composition - gives a whole new perspective ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

A soothing poem as usual!. I've been looking at the sky since ages ago!. What i'm aching to see right now is your mysterious poetic face! ;-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I always love looking up at the colors and images in the sky!. This a perfect description of the beauty above us!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A brilliant description and unique!. Very well done!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem is appropriate for the Beautiful SKY!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice descriptions and images!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amen!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Night sky is better!.!.!.
A face of a lover made beautiful by its light,
Glitter alive strewn across to its endsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yes !.!.!. when I feel boring !.!.!. the sky is blue with white clouds !.!.!.
sometimes grey before it's going to rain !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely! And yes I really have looked at the sky!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yes!.
yes, i have!.
interestingly strange poem!.

hmm!.!.!.

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BARF!

you fail it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have looked at the sky--but never in this way!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the sky, the thing that keeps us inWww@QuestionHome@Com

I dabble with paint as well as words, and you have this just right!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Have you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, then a bird pooped in my eye!

Howz that for a great rhym!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice i really like that :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.!.!.o!.!.!.k!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I was groovin' along just fine, until I hit that tree!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

mm!.!.!.!. k!.!.!.!.!. i know a doctor want his card!?Www@QuestionHome@Com