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Position:Home>Poetry> Do you like my other poem?Question: Do you like my other poem!? Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Okaii this isnt for ur question but i LOVE your pic!!! penguinWww@QuestionHome@Com I see a man, A most horrid man, who makes me feel like nothing!. When somethings good, he'll always ruin it and make it never good!. [something's] Life can't be good with him around, So when you see him, you won't be happy 'cause the good is sucked from you!. Why even be happy, why even try, [Why even be happy!? Why even try!?] Is life not only a waste!?! The only reason i'm even here is only because of her!.!.!.!.!. [I'm][omit the second "only"] But the horrid, sweaty, full of evil man won't give me a break, [just write "evil" instead of "full of evil"] Won't let me breath, won't let me drink a drop of water!. I'm held under the water and I cannot breath!. He's killing me and I'm dying faster, When will enough finally be enough!?! Because my pulse is slowing and soon I won't be breathing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Wow, you're a very good poet! It's a very good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com VERY GOOD!! I LIKE!! well done, if its a competition or something!.!.!.goodluck!.!.!.if not keep writing! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com to emo for me to much the same as everyone elsesWww@QuestionHome@Com Yeah, that`s good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Excellent job! Keep up the good work : )Www@QuestionHome@Com That was more than greatWww@QuestionHome@Com wow thats amazing, i loved itWww@QuestionHome@Com |