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Question: I still love it, what do you think!?
I love any oppurtunity to use alliteration, just so you know, and I love this short little poem, it didn't go so well at the slam, but I think that's because its so short, and it was my first time, thanks for your input!.

In a Garden Among the Dead

Our love was a fallacy
Burried lies and
Burried lives
In a garden among the dead

The false flowers are stark
Against your granite grave
The freshly carved words
Mark your life and death

In a garden among the dead
Our unreal love rings true
The bell tolls as a wedding is through
And the widow stands aloneWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This was beautiful!. I can picture everything in each verse!.
1st verse I see a cemetary!.
2nd verse I see a lover's grave stone!.
3rd verse I see that widow standing at her love's grave listening to the wedding bells!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It was pretty interesting I especially liked the 2nd verseWww@QuestionHome@Com