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Question: Can beauty be found in the sounds of a cliche!?
love,
thy precious
virtue, sears
with feelings that
drown my mind in thoughts of being with you, you
oh beautiful you, love oh love like a flower
thou art, a rose,
red red rose,
oh love
thy
have thorns
that sting, but
such a pretty
flower you
are, oh
love!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like the idea of taking a cliched poke at love (okay that could be interpreted weirdly)!.

You also may want to look at your other archaic language: Maybe "Thou hast thorns" instead of Thy have thorns!. I am by no means an expert on this type of language!.

I do like the idea behind the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

By the pricking of my thumb!
Of roses sharp, pierce me numb

Dull my nerve and steal my verve
Heart matters - steep, a learning curve
Project not the words of others doom
Bring one fresh broom to clear the room

Oh love, oh loss, oh love, oh!.!.!.!.!.not again!.
Here it comes!.!.!.!.!.Achooo!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry I cannot see past the cliche :(

I was clear on the meaning and the intentional cliche, but it was just so much cliche that the poem was a tricky one to finishWww@QuestionHome@Com

Cliches are one thing, atrocious grammar another!. If you want to go all archaic on us get it right!. It should read:
oh love
thou
hast thorns!.

We can't have archaic and eat it too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, it looks like Shakespeare beat you to the punch!.!.!.But, you did handle it well, trickling down like water!.!.!.Wait! That's a cliche'!.!.!.Dang!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a pretty piece of writing but i think that if you felt passoinly about the subject you could make it even better! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice poetry cliche and all !
Wow does it have to get that difficult thou thy thouest,!
Whew kind of takes the fun out of it thyest thinks!!! Cheers !!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's very pretty!.!.!.!.!.!.!.cliches aren't always bad, and in this case, worked very well : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes it can, but I don't think I would risk that many cliches again!Www@QuestionHome@Com

yep, you got it down pat!Www@QuestionHome@Com