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Question: I came to sing the sea to sleep!.!.!.!.!.a poem, care to comment!?
I came to sing the sea to sleep
by Jellz Fisher 2007
(This poem is an attempt to describe a photo, of a person, sitting on a rock upon a shore, at twilight, looking out to sea!. )
I came to sing the sea to sleep
A lullaby to the waves
Sat on my throne of shifting sand
Upon this darkened shore
In turn the waves they sang to me
A deep and low refrain
Calling, drawing, ebbing, turning
A weeping song of yore
The sands of time they sang in choir
Harmony called the tune
The sea, the sand, and I, as one
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Tranquility and fulfillment obtained - through the initial act of the giving of oneself!. The free act of giving (lullaby to the waves) - brought on an equal sharing from the sea (deep and low refrain)!. One's openness - permits the essence of harmony - to be noticed and enjoyed - thereby - giving the "giver"!. The more you give - the more you shall receive - type of thing ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Jellz - you don't need to explain your poem first!.!.!.!.!.really!. Be confident, you have every right to be!.
This poem has all the things I like - it has such a rocking rhythm (in the sense of a cradle being rocked!.!.!.!.not Elvis Presley!) which immediately grabs me!. It creates images which resonate with me - how I love to sit as you describe and watch the sea (tranquil or angry) and although it's not a rhyming piece!.!.!.!.your skill makes it seem that way!.
Well done
What a fabulous opening line!.!.!.!.!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is my type of poem!. I do this all the time!. Beautifully stated!.
Explanations detract from a poem's power!. Let the reader decide what the poem means!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow, that's amazing!. It's truly beautiful!. It created images in my head right away!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
What a beautiful poem!. I love each stanza, which stands on its own as a separate poem!. I want to go watch the sea, your poem calls to me!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
the second line and last line were a little off rhythm to me (no big deal)!. I liked the imagery!.!.!. I'm a sucker for beaches and sand!. I liked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful, J!. it sings!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This, is done well! My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com