Leave is in the air… a poem, care to comment?

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Leave is in the air
By Jellz Fisher 072608

I wonder if Edwin Hubble’s
wife left him because
…!.she needed space!.
Was he not focused
on their relationship
or in fact too far sighted!?

George Ferris’ wife
Didn’t hang around long either!.
She was heard to say
“The carnival is over,
it’s been a
rollercoaster journey,
I’m sure it will
turn out for the best”
We’ll see about that!.

G and L Norman
made the cut too!.
The wedge between
became too wide!.
They joined
“Club Holy Matrimoney”
It’s an irony
that they would!.
For them it was only
a good short game!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

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Quite a nice poem, With some work and some words substituted, It might flow a bit more, but You might want to leave it in its original form in order to preserve the feel that you were going to, also, have you ever thought about making a song Based on this poem, it might go well, but for now, take it easy and keep em coming!.!.!.
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I couldn't stop laughing - that line "she needed space" was priceless!. You have brought wit with joviality!. Thank you ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like the poem!. I think it's extremely CREATIVE and ORIGINAL!. Excellent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great poem!. I love it!. Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your ironic sense of humo(u)r brightens my day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com