Critique My Poem .... Maze of Life?

Question: Critique My Poem !.!.!.!. Maze of Life!?

I walked through Maze of life
I fell and stumbled
I rose up again
I saw the dangers
I saw the fear
Was not always easy
Often hard
Some times
I could not see the way
I looked around
There was mist
I ventured through
Where I am now!?
I have walked miles
In journey of lifeWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I'm lost once more within the maze
I've been here many times before
And still I find I can't ignore
The subtle signs, the dark displays
Or soon I see a hedge I passed
Ten years ago when last I fell;
A deja vu I can't dispell
Rolls over me, a die that's cast!.
And suddenly I know I'm lost
The walls, familiar hem me in
The corridors once wide now thin
And summer breezes turn to frost!.
When I was young I thought that when
I reached the age where I now stood
I'd know the pitfalls and I could
Walk through this labyrinth where men
Of other ages passed, but now
I knew my folly, it was great
And now alas the hour was late
And to the darkness I must bow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good but you need to throw in something with a wow factor!.!. something very profound!.

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hmmm i think it needs some more near the top!.!.!.
or maybe its just this part "i walked through maze of life" maybe change that to something else to make everything throw better!. its really amazing!. keep it up!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This maze of life is one heck of a walk!.
I would play with your words more!. My favorite tool is a Thesaurus, the other a dictionary!.
Your question "where am I now!?" is a good question!.
Lots of people are never aware of this question!.
Keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it, but it seems to lack a conclusion!. You also might want to include "the" where appropriateWww@QuestionHome@Com