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Question: A Poem - Patience - Do You Like!?
He sits in a motel room
screen torn and pried,
unafraid of intruders -
rocking his tomb!.
He contemplates a new life
serene and calm,
love essential in his plan -
taking a wife
Freedom is one week afar
seven dead days,
papers, signatures, and stamps -
opening bars!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's a well written piece!.!.!.
seven dead days,
papers, signatures and stamps-
opening bars!.
"Frailty!" is there any other good name for it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Patience is a virtue, but not the only one!.
The best time to know you have done the right thing!.!.!.
Is when it is already done!
The breeze that blows the window open --
May make the shutters creak and make you stand up and shout!
But the time you took to get up and see the light outside--
Is what life is all about!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a compelling poem with powerful imagery!. The juxtapositon of his reality and the new life he contemplates adds pathos to the imagery very effectively!. Yes, I like this very much!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like that I can substitute "taking a wife" and "divorcing my wife" and being able to see how easily both fit!. !.!. only an observation from my perspective!.!.!. enlightening piece!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This reminds me of Cynthia's poem about waiting for someone, when she says, "Time stops!." A week can be an eternity to someone waiting!.
This is very visual--a canvas of words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
What!.!.!. you talking about me!? lol Patience has to be learned, unfortunately for some it comes with a steeper price!. Well said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
May the seven days pass quickly! Wonderful!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like the imagery, but not the rhyming scheme!. But it was a nice read, thanks!. Stay Strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!
What must it be like to spend all those years behind bars and then be thrust back into reality!? Kind of overwhelming I imagine!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!. ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
I felt like I was there!. Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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