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Question: Just a poem this time can you check it out!?
Take time to look around,
Take a chance where oppotunitymay be found,
The risk is there,
Don't just stare,
Make a break and just don't careWww@QuestionHome@Com


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take the time to look around-
take chance where opportunity can be found-
the risk is there-
don't just stare, take a chance -
and then lets share-Www@QuestionHome@Com

The meter on your second line is a little awkward!.

Perhaps

Take the time to look around
Take a chance and opportunity's found

Will improve the flow without altering the meaning!?

also the first line I added a the to give the structure evenness

Take The time!.!.!.
Take a Chance!.!.!.
Make a Break!.!.!.

It is always hard when you tinker with some's work, so I hope you found this contructive!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

This poem is about time
invites a person to look around
there is much to see
Don't be shy
take chances but be careful
as there are risks
Look pay attentionWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's nice!. Just the second sentence needs to be shortened so it rhymes with the rest!. Yes I know, not all poetry has to rhyme but I just presumed you wanted all to rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com