Take time to look around,
Take a chance where oppotunitymay be found,
The risk is there,
Don't just stare,
Make a break and just don't careWww@QuestionHome@Com
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Take a chance where oppotunitymay be found, The risk is there, Don't just stare, Make a break and just don't careWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: share take the time to look around- take chance where opportunity can be found- the risk is there- don't just stare, take a chance - and then lets share-Www@QuestionHome@Com The meter on your second line is a little awkward!. Perhaps Take the time to look around Take a chance and opportunity's found Will improve the flow without altering the meaning!? also the first line I added a the to give the structure evenness Take The time!.!.!. Take a Chance!.!.!. Make a Break!.!.!. It is always hard when you tinker with some's work, so I hope you found this contructive!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com This poem is about time invites a person to look around there is much to see Don't be shy take chances but be careful as there are risks Look pay attentionWww@QuestionHome@Com It's nice!. Just the second sentence needs to be shortened so it rhymes with the rest!. Yes I know, not all poetry has to rhyme but I just presumed you wanted all to rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |