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Question: I love to love you~!.!.!.Do you like!?
When i see you
i see the object
of all love i can love-
unconditional,infinite,
true and pure!.


When I strain my ears
in the quiet alleys under water
leading into the decks
of a wrecked ship
I could hear you
whisper to the ears
of sea foams
asking them to sway
into a silver loom
that mends their silken sails;
sets them back
to the ocean tops!.
and I wake
my tearful eyes to
diamond treasures
they leave behind;
I smile again
like you always want

And I think
of all fond memories
of that moment
when we first met
when i became a woman
without even knowing
that i have found
one precious find
-joy

I wonder to myself:
shall I lock you
in my tresses
and call you
my heart beat
because with your
pulsating rythms
I'm eternal;

but so are you:
rekindling
your flames
everytime i rejoice
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very lovely!. I get a little tripped up at the end of the third strophe!.!.!."that I found / one precious find / --joy"!.!.!.not sure about the syntax of that!.!.!. but I believe a closer look at punctuation across those lines could help!.

It could use a better title!. Something that is a little more fluid, like the rest of the language of the poem!. "Call you my heartbeat" is very resonant!.!.!.that would work as a title!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

holy crap!!!!!
thats the most beautiful
amazing
well written poem ive ever read
dont stop
I want to read more :DWww@QuestionHome@Com