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Question: I have a new poem!. (meaning of love)!?
please tell me what you think!.

“The Meaning of Love”
Brittany Evanko

When you love someone, you can look into their eyes!.
And know the last thing they would ever do is despise!.
You deny the truth, or believe the biggest lie!.
There will be times when you believe you can fly!.

Walking side by side, and hearts beating together;
Feeling as if you were as light as a feather!.
Trusting everything you have in their hands!.
Knowing they will never leave, like the oceans sands!.

As the waves graciously flow one after another,
You know you can’t live without each other!.
As the different colors blend in the sky,
Neither of you ask, no one has to ask why!.

When you have the blessing of love,
Nothing is more peaceful than the message of a dove!.
When you love someone, nothing is hard to do!.
Everything comes easy when I am with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you can write realy good!. the only thing that i find confusing is that at the beginning you were talking about how you will believe them even when they lie and that that you can believe you can fly and it seems like your trying to say that love is not perfect but then you go on and make it so that everything is perfect!.!.!. wow that sounds confusing but idk how else to put it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its quite a nice poem with good rhyming and alliteration!.But It needs a bit of spicing with more metaphors and similes!.also,I don't see any depth in the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

put it in a draw and read it again in ten years time, if you still think it true seek help!.Www@QuestionHome@Com