What do you think of my American Ku?

Question: What do you think of my American Ku!?

Ecliptic dark skies
Tears float down from winters due
Drought season arrived!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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In the West (America, Europe, etc!.) most haiku no longer adhere to the 5-7-5 syllable count!. also, they tend to avoid metaphorical language, i!.e!., (tears float down)!. also, commonly the way to acheive the "haiku feel" is to juxtapose two distinct images against each other!. In your piece, I only see one distinct image--rain from a dark sky!. The last line is more of a summary, and not really an image!.

Definition: A haiku is a short poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of an experience of nature or the season intuitively linked to the human condition!.

Here is the Haiku Society of America's definition:
Notes: Most haiku in English consist of three unrhymed lines of seventeen or fewer syllables, with the middle line longest, though today's poets use a variety of line lengths and arrangements!. In Japanese a typical haiku has seventeen "sounds" (on) arranged five, seven, and five!. (Some translators of Japanese poetry have noted that about twelve syllables in English approximates the duration of seventeen Japanese on!.) Traditional Japanese haiku include a "season word" (kigo), a word or phrase that helps identify the season of the experience recorded in the poem, and a "cutting word" (kireji), a sort of spoken punctuation that marks a pause or gives emphasis to one part of the poem!. In English, season words are sometimes omitted, but the original focus on experience captured in clear images continues!. The most common technique is juxtaposing two images or ideas (Japanese rens?)!. Punctuation, space, a line-break, or a grammatical break may substitute for a cutting word!. Most haiku have no titles, and metaphors and similes are commonly avoided!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Since the poets understand that Hai'ku is not an American form, we have been using other names for this form!.

You have amazing talent for imagery!. Just one suggestion: "winters" = winter's!. I would probably prefer "Drought season is here" to smooth out the meter, but this is lovely as it stands!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

american cu!?!? doncha mean hai-cu!?!?
but AWESOME!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

oh thats nice! I like it alot!!Www@QuestionHome@Com