Do you like my new Essence Poem?

Question: Do you like my new Essence Poem!?

Essence
The Essence, created by Emily Romano is a short, structured form of two-lines,
six syllables each with an end rhyme and internal rhyme!.

Pastel coloured dust shine,
Beneath woven crust lime,Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I am puzzled on this
condemn or I amiss!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

i can't give you a great opinion because this is the first i've heard of this structure!.!.!.so let me begin by thanking you for explaining it!.

the form seems to be in order, but "woven crust lime" sounds like random words strung together!. perhaps you could find another word to replace one of them in order to make it more understandable!.

also, is the comma at the end a typo!? or is there meant to be more!?

OOOOHHHH! i get it! now that i know what it is about, i'm not sure that my advice is accurate, but if you do change one of the words, make it woven!. it is poetic, but also the one that throws the theme off!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thanks Galactia I am learning alot from your post!.

So far I've learned about the converb, essence, trigee, and haiku from you!.

Your good at this, keep up the excellent work!

I`m going to call you Mrs!. Tia *** (forgot ur last name)
or Professor Tia!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds good to me!. Welcome to the Trend Setters Club!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

enjoyed tyWww@QuestionHome@Com