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Question: More poems!. What do you think!?
I'm on a roll!. Here are a couple more poems for you all to critique!

Prison of White

Wildly flying from wall to wall,
never finding a corner!.
Terribly crying
and reaching for life,
and grabbing nothing but nothing!.
In the midst of everything, nothing is found,
just lost to wander in a prison of white!.


Brink of Destruction

I find myself lost in the darkness
Reaching toward what I shouldn't!.
Wanting the forbidden,
And once every so often I'll touch it
And taste on fingertips,
The warm ecstacy of Taboo!.
And I want more
But I've slipped a little
And it's further away!.
For a little while longer
I'm safe from myself!.
But try as I may
I cannot fight the urge for long,
And I'm back again
At the brink of destruction!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Brink of Destruction is excellent!. Uncapitalize the first letter of each line and write it as you are feeling and thinking it and with punctuation so it reads better!. Otherwise the structure is spot on and the content is very thought provoking!.

Prison of white is just plain spooky but it's also good!. :O))

I can't critique what already works!.Www@QuestionHome@Com