What do you think?. It's not my best just something I put together so you ca

Question: What do you think!?!. It's not my best just something I put together so you can be honest!.!.!.!.!. okies thanks!

~From your silky hair, to you soul percing eyes,
the feelings of such a rush that I get to my surprise!.!.!.
Kissable lips, soft sensual skin
from the touches that makes me feel as if the greatest prize i did win!.
The fact that you listen all censer, and make the gray skies
be ever so clear!. I gave out love you gave it back,
it is the best feeling no I wouldn't want to change that!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think that the subject is rather cliche, but the girl you wrote this for would probably appreciate it!. I tried to make your syllable counts even while maintaining the rhyme scheme!.!.!.so here are my suggestions (including grammar, spelling, and the removal or changing unnecessary/inappropriate words):

For your silky hair and soul-piercing eyes,
My feelings rush, quick in lurching surprise!.
Those kissable lips, soft sensual skin,
You are the prize I was most glad to win!.

The ways you listen can move gray skies,
Leave them so clear!.!.!.the love I gave, you sent back,
Our connection's perfect, and I wouldn't change that!.

You don't have to take all of my suggestions- take what you like, leave out what you don't!. ^^

Good luck!.!.!.overall, this wasn't too bad!. At the very least, you seemed genuine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

honestly i like the first half and not the second : )))))))))Www@QuestionHome@Com