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Question: My poem !.!.!.!.!.broken friendship!?
i`m only 15 and can`t speak / write english that much!. I`m a filipina
broken friendship
How sad it is
to our friendship to end
for all these years
we`ve been best friends!.
why do you have to stab me on my back!?
when i was faithful to you
why did you do this to me!?
I thought our friendship was true!
All these times I didn`t know
how really bad you can be
I finally knew who you really are
a monster that soon everyone will see!.
sorry for my bad english I`m not an american and we don`t study nglish here in japan!.please help me correct it!.
tnxWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's really inspiring for someone who does not speak english!.
Pretty good- their are some errors but overall good!. The fluidity of the poem needs some work but the content is great and the storyline- awesome!.
I'll correct the major some errors for you!.
How sad it is
for our friendship to end
for all these years
we were best friends
why do you have to stab me in the back!?
when I was faithful to you
why did you do this to me
I thought our friendship was true
all these times I didn't know
how really bad you can be{try to re-write this, it doesn't flow}
I finally know who your really are
a monster, that soon everyone will seeWww@QuestionHome@Com
great!. you made me cry, lol!. im living that exact situation!. okay heres the correct english i believe!.!.!.!.!.
how sad it is,
(for) our friendship to end
for all these years,
we had been best friends!.
why did you have to stab me in the back!?
when i was faithful to you
why did you do this to me!?
i thought our friendship was true!
all these times i didnt know,
how truly bad you can be!.
i finally know who you really are,
a monster that soon everyone will see!.
your english was very close!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow, that was touching
remindss me of my ex-best friend
anywayyy I agree 100% with Run Wild
he/she's got everything down :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
heck you write peotry better than a large part ofamericans it very good!. i think its great but change for to afterWww@QuestionHome@Com
i like it the way it isWww@QuestionHome@Com