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Question: Rewritten as you sugested!. I hope it is better!?
Oh see what you look at and remember it all well,
feel what you touch and let your touch lightly dwell!.
Oh hear when you listen with an understanding ear,
smell the scents of season’s bouquets of the year!.
Oh look at the beauty of Autumn a month of fruitfulness,
enjoy each changing season, which bring on happiness!.
Oh hear the burning branches and bubbling hissing sap,
smell the wild field mushrooms gathered in your cap!.
The sights the sounds heard over hill and grassy dale,
a brooks merry gurgle as it meanders through the vale!.
All seasons bring joy and happiness to every cast of men,
each year in their own God given time, Amen and Amen!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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It is perfect!. Your poetry soars with imagery, rhyme, assonance and meter!. It engages all the senses: sight, sound, smell, touch!. And it engages the intellect and the spirit!. Your poem tastes delicious!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Overall I like!. Possible critiques to consider!. Stanza 1 has a beat pattern of 13,11,13,11!. Stanza 2 jumps to 15,13,13,11!. Stanza 3 goes to 12,14,15,14!. (provided I counted them all right) Stanza 2 to me seems to wander as if you are trying to cover all the seasons yet start by talking about August!? Stanza 3 "to every cast of men" as I read that the singular form "man" would be the correct choice to me!. I could be wrong!. As I said before, I like!. Your words flow well and outside of the rhyme of men to Amen, the rhymes seemed natural!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Look and see, hear, feel, touch your heart!.
Love is all around us!.
Your poem, a nice rendering, become aware!.Www@QuestionHome@Com