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Question: Are there Kinks in this lyrical poem!?
For Neonman

I think I'm illuminated
'Cos I'm hanging round here like a good poetwriterman
All around me poets are ever-trying
Till they are flying like astronauts man
I'm no better than the poets from across the ages
At their pens man
'Cos compared to laureates of the sages and the seers
I am a simple man
They know I'm so enable and able to criticize
'Cos I'm a well versed wordsmithman
Coping with the over-inundation and exponential thumbulation
Of the pretending Trolls man

I’m a spaceman, I’m a space-space man
Well I’m a spaceman
Oooooooh
I’m a spaceman I’m Neonman
Well I’m a spaceman
Don’t wanna write on the earth no more
I wanna slip the latch on a rocket door
Wanna fly away to a Martian shore
And make like a spaceman
OoohWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Jellz, the pearls are flowing
illuminating like neon's shine
I'd sell you some trannies
but your lighting's fine,
just remember meter! lol!.

Well said, enjoyable and thank you!. Simple is what I do best!. What you read into it is your pleasure!.!.!.!.hopefully! Trolls though do seem to inspire, especially when they pick on others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I did not immediately see what you had done until the tune came into my head- you really do have a knack for wordplay and pun-menship!. Do you ever do any anagram-type of composition or song!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, you missed "meter" as in electricity and poetry! I am ashamed of you!. Neonman is (almost) as witty as you!. You have made your own dictionary for the Virtual Universe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was really great!. I loved your reference to the dumbass
trolls!. Right now we have one that`s really annoying, But I think you already know that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Jellz, you are so illuminated you outshine many suns and many poets!. Won't need no space heaters with you in this corner of the universe!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

the last bit sounds sort of like a songWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nicely Done!!! ,,,,Where ever you go it will be BRIGHTLY LIT !!! !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it, man!.!.!.I've been admiring your flippant, witty, throw-away responses for ages (thinking this man is a poet - through and through) and here you are proving my point!. (if you've posted before, my apologies 'cos I've missed 'em)

Edit - First of all - shock, horror I'm sorry, I always thought you were a boy!. Second of all (as you Americans say) I am so glad I got this link!.!.!.I would have missed a real gem!. Do you know something (not chatting, honest) Buckley was raised on rabbit kibble!.!.!.he lived in my son's flat and he said his poo was more bearable that way!. So, he looks at his fresh offerings now with great suspicion!. I will print your poem and give it to Ben (my son) to keep!. Brilliant - I wish my jokey poems were half as good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com