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TUESDAY, 28th SEPTEMBER

I remember!.!.!.one September -
saw a robin - my first that year!.
You were with me that September -
ah! I remember it so clear!.

I've seen many robins since then,
but somehow I hold that one dear!.
Perhaps because that day was when
I saw you last and held you near!.

You're not with me any longer -
like that robin you flew away,
but my memory's grown stronger
of that enchanted Autumn day!.

I remember that September -
and that robin - my first that year!.
You were with me that September -
so I remember with a tear!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Again A Very Nice Worded,and Meaningful
Piece!.
Well Done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a nice poem!. Some of the rhymes do seem a bit forced!. For what my advice is worth, I'd say focus more on the imagery of the words to create an atmosphere instead of the rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very sweet and reflectful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

a lovely sentiment, autumn's melancholy sets the scene!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

So Sad, Lighten Up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com