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Question: Another poem (my 4th)!. Probly the strongest,but shortest!. What do you think, and what are your fav!. lines!?
another love poem about the woman im tied down to :/ enjoy!.!.!.

"I miss your love and affection
don't make this an exception
just because we aren't together
doesn't mean this can't last forever
What you and i have is something epic
something special
maybe too special for other to come between it
thats why we are still talkin like everything is okay!.
But if its not today
I know someday you'll be back in my arms
And i'll brace you and never let go,
welcoming you back home!.
You truely know you belong with me
Things in life are not the way we want it to be
making me want to do something drastically!.
But at the end of the day i say its okay
because you have been thinkin of me
as much as i've been thinkin of you!.
and together we can't be fooled!.
you love me and i love you!.
Its something you can't deny
real love never die's!."

by M!.A!.V!.
(sorry guys i don't feeel comfortable givin out my real name)Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's like a letter with basic feelings of love flowing through your pen!. The utilization of metaphors would make you sound deeper!. Remember in Incomplete when Sisqo was flowing:
Pretty faces from the covers of the magazines
From their covers to my covers want to lay with me!?
The transition provided a visual that did it for me!. My favorite line in your composition was: What you and I have is something epic, something special maybe too special for others to come between it!.

Keep Expressing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its like (C) Rap music,

Rhyming is a bit crude with adjacent lines , I prefer 1/3 amd 2/4 as in!.

"I miss your love and affection
when we are not together!.
I can't get no erection
when I'm with a one night lover

You and I have something epic
Others should not to come between us
And you may find this pathetic
But you bring me great HappinessWww@QuestionHome@Com

your first name is MATT im guessing!.!.!.well fellow writer, i dont do poems but i write!.!.!.you need some metoaphors or personifications!.!.!.!.this is like a love letter!.!.!.!.!.you need things that a person has never read before, thats what makes poems so good!.!.!.!.like quick example
"welcoming you back home!." Wecoming you back to a place of a sweet smell of memoriesWww@QuestionHome@Com

you need to add more devices matt or micheal!. more poetic tools-pun, anology, rhyme, imagery and personication like that!. but overall it's great!. well done!.
10 points!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a very good poem, my fav line is things in life are not the way we want it to be!. its very true, i really like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very good job with this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com