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Question: I've written a poem!. Could I have your opinions on it please!?
*Reunion*

Arms outstretched,
Feel the pull,
Clicks and groans,
From my weary old bones

I spring to life and jump once more,
The air gushes and lulls me to sleep
Jumping higher, I fly to my place;
Jump, jump, the sun in my face

Wonder and awe fill my eyes,
My burning memories will be lost in time,
Say a final good-bye to my lonely earth,
Where will I be in my next re-birth!?

Still as beautiful as before,
I see my soul-mate mother once more,
We spin together in a forceful embrace;
So pleased am I to see her face

Could you tell me your opinions on it please!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like this poem, Eve! I think the imagery is very good, it doesn't try to force the rhyme, and it has an intelligent point of view!. You seem to have a good handle on what makes a good poem! Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

In my opinion you have died and went to heaven to meet your mother!. You miss her and instead of self pity or depression fits you write!. It is a nice piece to me and shows mental stability and intelligence on your part!.

Keep WritingWww@QuestionHome@Com

i really like this poem!. i think its about how you and your mother have not seen each other for years and you finially get to be reunited!. its lovelyWww@QuestionHome@Com

i just hav to say one word AWESOME!. i love writting poems too and write them quite well!. bt urs was simply awesome!. it seemed lik u really wanted it, lik it was ur strong desire!. i just simply loved itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wait so death is pleasing!.!.!. sweet!. We need a good view on something horrid, right!? I don't like the use of the word 'jump', but that's my opinion, Great imagery over all dear!. Stay strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

is it about seeing heaven and reuniting with a loved one!? it sounds that way to me!. nice, nice!. i like the rhyming scheme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

Tell me if I'm wrong, but I think you're intimating you believe in the foolish "reincarnation" thing ("I see my soul-mate mother !.!.!. we spin together in a forceful embrace!.!.!."); although I like your imagery and thoughts about how this world will one day end, this is true, have you put any thought into what The Bible has to say about your meeting Father God!?-- not that I'm forcing the male - female issue here, but even the American Indians understood, Mother Earth, Father Sky - as a reference to where we are headed!. I believe they had a better understanding of male / female traits embedded in us for a reason!. (we have a deep need for Father in our psyche--Mother we have known her well and too much of her makes us weak)

So although your poem is well-written, popular and accepted widely in its appeal, and "with it" in our culture today, it is sadly lacking true depth of character!. Don't take my word for it, go to the source of wisdom, our Creator (Father who lives in Heaven)Www@QuestionHome@Com