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Question: Poem 3, what do you think!?
I Lost My Touch



Woke up from a bed or maybe even a rock
Because touch left me it wasn't hard or soft
Touch left me and taken my shoes
Having to leave without touch means I would loose
Touch left me taking away my splash
Smart enough to take my cash
Touch was hiding at the bottom of the pool
What did touch think I wasn't a fool
I dived right in feeling no splash
Touch apologized and gave me back my wet cash
Touch missed me and grabbed right on
Man I was right and boy was Touch wrong
But once we connected I would never forget
The feeling of me thinking
The touch of me sinking
I woke up and touched around
Man touch was so mean
To think it was only a dreamWww@QuestionHome@Com


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I like it, I'm not a big poetry admirer but I thought this was good!. By the way, there is a spelling mistake on line 4 - you have written "means I would loose" but I think you mean "means I would lose"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it a lot! It's very rhythmic and flowy!. It felt so real, and then you cut it off by saying it was just a dream!.!.I liked that a lot! Great job!

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thats really good, sounds like a rapWww@QuestionHome@Com