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Question: Poetry: what do you think of my poem!?
my second serious love poem and i am 12 years old, please let me know if i am talented!.
she was beautiful, oh so beautiful
he knew if he didnt epress himself others would take her away
If she was a man he would rather turn gay
then face the fact that they wouldnt be together
he made his every endeavor
to get her to realize what they could be
even thinking about it "you and me"
made him happy
thinking about what they could be
soon enough someone did take her away
death did them part and he had no sayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is really really good!! I think you should switch the 9 and 10 line!.!.it would make more sense! But that was soooooo good!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it was a good poem, but you could make it better!. be a little more consistent with the rhyme scheme!. either make it rhyme or don't, but it feels like you tried but then couldn't be creative with it!.
other than that, it was great :)
i loved the last two lines most\
Blessed BeWww@QuestionHome@Com
aight
great job! some tips are switch the 10th and 9th line!. i think it would make more sense!. and i love the part with turing gay it is very clever ;) now all it needs is a good title! (ask if ya need help)
keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I don't think it is very good!. It is never clear what is happening and who it is happening to!. Be specific!. Or, as one of my professors said, "write about something!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
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