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Question: Does this amp up the action at all!?
Gun Shy Kisses-(+)-
#7
Turning a corner
she followed
Down an alley
she went…
a Dead end
she stopped behind me
“Are you Charlotte!?”
“Are you important enough to know!?”
Her face,
unchanged, darkened
as she said
“You will not touch Kay…
She’s mine!”
-This one was hard for me to write… I didn’t know how to get the action going after the last one and I didn’t want to go into more little details at this point… I wanted to get to the meet before people lost interest!. How did I do!? This one will be easier to follow for me… I have more of a plan for the next chapter in this saga of a Seeker (meaning assassin in this world)…
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes, this amps up the action, and now I wonder what they assassin's are feuding over!. The seduction of Kay, or the killing of Kay!. I'm theoretically on the edge of my seat!. I do love Charlotte's very brassy question!. "Are you important enough to know!?" That was excellent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice twist and I like the "Are you important enough to know"
Here are some changes below!. Use what works ignore the rest:
Turning a corner
she followed
Down an alley
which came to
a Dead end
a voice behind me
“Are you Charlotte!?”
“Are you important enough to know!?”
Her face,
darkened
as she said
“You will not touch Kay…
She’s mine!”
It seems to be picking up to me!.!.!.keep it up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
duh!. of course!. yes!.
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the whole series is wonderfulll!.
i just read all of them!.
could you answer my !? plz
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I just saw this on the Yahoo! Answers homepage and then I HAD to read the first ones!. You are an amazing writer!! I love love love it!! Keep up the good work!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
So!.!.!.there are two seekers after one mark!. That is ,indeed, intriguing!. Why does either one want this prey dead!? Are we ever to know!? I must read on!.!.!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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