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Question: All rather fast, I know!. Oh well!. How can I make this better!?
Demused-Evolution of a Poet VII

She stands at the door,
carrying all
that we owned!.
It is hers by right!.

"Why must you go!?"
I ask, once more a child!.
"Why do you leave
when I most need you!?"

"I gave you a contract
signed in blood!.
What begins in blood
must end in blood!."

I protest but,
her eyes cut my soul!.
"I would not have you
watch me die
and be reborn!.
It is not a sight
for mortals, or poets!."

Her fingers, vapor,
touch my cheek!.
"I've stayed far too long
as it is!."Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Of course, I knew this was coming, but it still is a shock because I do not know how this will end!. Perhaps it is because of the lightness of the poet's soul that will be the death of the muse if she stays!. Does this mean that we are only blessed with a muse when we are suffering!? Or will it all turn out to be a cycle!? I cannot wait to find out!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have never been able to include speech in my poetry, sadly!. Try including some imagery to show us what is going on, not just telling us!. Describe the door, describe to room, describe the mood and her tone of voice!.

I'm interested in finding out what this is about though!. Is it a series of poems that you are working on!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

And so she WILL be reborn!.!.!. always a painful process, I know!.!.!. but a worth while process in the end!.!.!.

Side note: I hope you are happy with me, not sure if they are the right words but the last 5 comments I have made I have not had any misspelled words come up on the spellchecker!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good! but i think you could keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com