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Question: I Am Waiting!.!. comments!.!. please pull it apart if you have the notion!.!?
The light of autumn glows on the surface of my river!.
The sun creeps up the slope of my darkening hill!.
Golding, yellowing aspens tremble
and the butter coloured glory of these birch leaves quiver
I am mesmerized, agape---awe-filled, still!.
Above, the earth is heavy protecting me from the gusts
of cold, the steel gray skies of winters coming!.
I am not sad!. I am waiting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I would add the word 'cow' to your name and make it 'cowpat', because that just about sums up your poetry!. You, like a lot of contributors to this site, are seriously deluded in your estimation of where your talents lie!. Sorry to be so frank, but I've seen your critiques of other people's stuff and you obviously regard yourself as some kind of authority!. Give it up, pal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the only things I would change is spacing, capitals start each new line and I would get rid of the "and" at the beggining of line four and you'll have a stronger sentence!.

spacing changes:

Above,
the earth is heavy protecting me from the gusts of cold,
The steel gray skies of winters coming!.
I am not sad!.

I am waiting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A nice painted picture, What would it change if you left the
two "my's" out, replace with different word!.Www@QuestionHome@Com