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Question: Part II - how can I improve this!?
Demused-Evolution of a Poet II

I don't remember
when we met,
my haunted angel!.!.!.

Maybe it was when
the coffee mug was thrown,
or the Bible ripped in half!.

Dimly, in my memory,
her voice whispered to me!.
But those words were
stolen,

and I,
wrongfully accused!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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This one is better than the first to me, though the first was necessary for a set up!.!.!. I especially like the part about the bible and the coffee!.!.!. placing those two concepts together in such and Eva manner!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A pause for reflection, and it is written so beautifully!. There is already so much to ponder!. A sense of mystery is created in this one as well!. I shall read on!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this one!. Especially the line "my haunted angel" and "but htose words were stolen!." You have much better flow in this part than the first!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Was it ripped long-ways or a cross!?Www@QuestionHome@Com