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Question: What do you think of this poem!? #2!?
"Your Broken Promise"


You said you'd always be there for me
You promised never to leave
You said I could rely on you forever
Our ties, you promised never to sever

But I guess I've been replaced
You won't even look me in the face
It's like I'm a piece of trash
As disgusting to you as corned beef hash

Once she came into the picture, I was thrown away
Even though you said that we were okay
I knew something had changed you
You left me for something anew

She can't love you like I can
She's only another fan
In time, you'll see what she really is
As uncertain as soda fiz

So go and have fun with her
She's not going to treat you well, Sir
You are now her tool; she just wants your money
I loved you before the riches; isn't that funny!?

So when you realize that she's fake
Go ahead, get rid of her; use a rake
But don't think you can come running back to me
You broke your promise, don't you see!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hayy Girl you have some talent :)

that was honestly beautiful and touching
i really like it!.


Do you like write poems for a living or just do them for fun because you should really write moreWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it A lot, but you can really cut out a lot of words!.

Like in the beginning, don't say "YOU" as much, because it becomes repetitive!

Instead:

You said you'd always be there for me
Promised never to leave
Said I could rely on you forever
Our ties, you promised never to sever

She can't love you like I can
Only another fan
In time, you'll see what she really is
As uncertain as soda fiz


But really good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com