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Question: Poem/Lyric!.!.!.I wrote!.!.!.thanks!?
All eyes focus on this calender,
It's counting the days away,
And I smell a hint of lavender,
You must have just walked in!.
I peel my eyelids away from the eye,
Just to see if I can look inside!.
But with your tongue on the floor,
I've relised I've been here before!.

The stopping motion of the traffic,
Fulfills my dreams of walking slow,
I've been up at this all night long,
Still I've managed to right no wrongs!.
To be the first, means to be the worst,
I'm still young but I'm ready to die,
I know what your thinking inside your mind,
'What a strange way to meet eyes'!.

For God sake don't you relise this,
Relise that it's all one great list,
Your names at the top mines at the bottom,
In between doesn't mean a thing!.
I captured a bee just to feel it's sting,
I thought it would help, but it made me think!.
It gets enjoyment once in it's life,
Then is goes and crawls off and dies!.

rest to come now!!!

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
"Your eyes will meet one thousand tonight,
But I hope that you will remember mine"

that's my favorite line!.

a bit much rhyming for my taste but I really enjoy the way you phrase things!.

good on!. can I add some guitar to it!? I could email you file of it or something!.

edit: right on!. I have a little riff I cant key in any vocals with right now!.

check out the link below for a project I'm involved with!. there is a song that starts out with the lyric "as I see!.!.!.all these moments pass me by" the lyrics are pretty bad a$$ if I do say so myself!.

and then more editing: I just did a spoken word thing with a lazy acoustic guitar riff!. that actually sounded cool!. I may record it tomorrow actually!. I gotta go to bed though man!.!.!.works a ******!. I'll shoot you an email to keep in touch!.

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