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Question: Help please, is this lost memory relevant!?
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Owl eyes peered from forest branches!.
Beaver slapped their tails in icy warning!.

The reality behind my meditation did not register!.
I do not know what monsterous disaster
had befallen me to bring about oblivion!.

I remember only beaver slaps and autumn chill
and owl eyes and the bridge
looming black against the sky!.

A monument to evenings silence,
summers death,
my now forgotten requiem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow! You buried an important summer with respect, was it your 16th!? Hope your new-found maturity brings you no cause for regret later in life and do keep on writing as you have the rare ability to shade words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice picture U try to re-paint here, but U R missing some tools such as rhyme (register , register) !. also U have redundancy ( repeating the same words for the same seen U have been taken w/!. (beaver slapped ,beaver slaps , owl eyes)!.!. I like the last 3 lines even though The "my" in last line is it 'by" or "my" !.!. doesn't matter any way!.!. try again!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How well you are in tune to the seasons change, It sings of
the "September Song" you express my yearly melancholy
held so long, I can't remember when it started!. Kudos!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Certainly, an interesting progression!. The title threw me off although I sense your intent!. Summer leaves in a hurry, the requiem quickly forgotten!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Hi!",

Wow you put a lot of thought into the expression of your poem, providing vibrant image and a story to tell!.

WELL DONE!
Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

wut the heck are you trying to ask or want an answer i don't get the question or the other info!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com