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All I want is for you to trust me,
So all I've given you is honesty,
I'm trying to understand you,
and I can tell,
You're trying to hear the truth,
I know it's hard to have faith,
When you've been hurt before,
I know because I'm the same way,
I guess both our hearts are sore,
But please, just try to trust me,
everything I say is true you'll see,
Just how wonderful TRUE love can be,
So tell me anything,
Believe me, I've already accepted your ring,
I love you THAT much, you've just gotta klnow it's true,
I'd never ever think about leaving you!
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I really like it, thank you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Whitney,
Your sonnet style is sweet and to the point and I like positive uplifting messages!. But grammatically it's little flat and something's you omit don't make sense!. Maybe if you make four sentence verses or stanzas it would be a lot better to read!.!.!.
BELIEVE
Love can be more trusting
We need to give more honestly,
Don't make something out of nothing
You have to let love be!.
Have no doubt
And go all out
I'm falling to my knees,
All we have to do is believe
The feelings I have for you
In all the love songs that they sing,
Thing that lovers go through
The I Do's to wear your ring
Make it clear
Everyone can hear
So high I can barely breathe,
All we have to do is believeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Wow, that is really deep!. I can feel all the emotion in it!. I love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Needs quite a bit of work, but hints at some promise (maybe)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
really good sweet poemWww@QuestionHome@Com