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I am-

I am, weak and breakable,
I wonder, why life is so hard,
I hear, my silent teardrops fall,
I see, a puddle of wet salty misery,
I want, to mean it when I smile,
I am, weak and breakable,

I pretend, that my life is flawless,
I feel, like a delicate ripped rose petal,
I touch, my weepy whimpering face to your shoulder as you tenderly hold me close,
I worry, you'll think of me as a different person,
I cry, becasue I can't keep this saddness bottled up,
I am, weak and breakable,

I understand, you want to help me,
But I say, there's nothing you can do,
I dream, of my life without agony, hurting and distress,
I try, not to cry around you,
I hope, you have the patience to see past my faults,
I am, weak and breakable,

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I have read thousands of poems and written many myself!.

Your poem touches the deeper emotions and actions of pain!. It is well-written, fluid and relatable!.

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OMG that is beautiful, I think it really captures the raw emotions of being desperately miserable!. Bravo !Www@QuestionHome@Com

That poem is well written, and I loved it :]

I give it a 10, outta 10!.
It shows your feelings, and it's just great!
I'm glad I could read it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Again, this is a fabulous and deep poem!. People can relate to it!. I love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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A really well written poem that portrays deep, inner hurt!.Www@QuestionHome@Com