A poem for your thoughts?

Question: A poem for your thoughts!?

Splat!
By Semper Fi Reborn

My mind is speeding in a work zone!.
Will the fines be doubled,
If I'm troubled!?
I zip past the signs
That shout my demise!.
Pedestrians in lines,
With fear in their eyes,
Run and scramble for safety!.
My mind is not buckled!.
If I click it no ticket,
Yet I press on my luck like an EASY button!.
But my button's stuck and,
I'm not a luck man, it's nothing,
I better keep on trucking!.
Mind swerving,
Wheels spinning from the beginning,
Like my brain has a hemi!.
Feeling good I jump the curb and go!.!.!.!.!.
SPLAT!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think the yawns and boring only came from a lack of experience or an age difference possibly! I thought this was excellent!. I understood where each of the the little ads you used came from!. So just keep on with your bad self!. I like it, which is only my opinion, but oh well!. Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is my sense
That a poetic license
Don't let you go cruising
When you're clearly losing
Your mind!.

I like your meter, but it don't let you park
I like your rhythm, it's your benchmark
I like the poem's music a lot
Does it make you sick!? Hope not!
You're kind!.

Please stay out of my street
Park the car, use your feet
You ride like a dervish
It's making me nervish
I find!.

Saw
Poem,
Laughed
At
Times!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

lol I loved it very much!. I like how you compared your racing mind to speeding traffic!.

I wrote a poem similar to this where I compared myself to a computer who`s master board was about to shut down!. I was having an anxiety attack when I wrote that one!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

go Semper Fi!
and i hope it was just a case of soda you ran over!. lol
i liked the line
zip past the signs!.
thats a real moment!
and
my mind is not buckled!.!.
a brain hemi !.!.!.
its a nascar day going to work eh!? lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

This was so very good, I like your style of writing ,intriguing ,easy read! I loved your play on the ending word, and looked forward to each sentence to see how you were going to word the next! Nice !!! Cheers !!Www@QuestionHome@Com

thought i just wanted to say Hi to You!.!.!.How is that kid you were watching do!.!.You said something was wrong and you asked for prayer for him!.!.!.Anyways just thought i stop in for some poem!.!.God Bless YouWww@QuestionHome@Com

very catchy, i keep re-reading it, it's addictiveWww@QuestionHome@Com

i liked it! a little slow moving but still very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

*yawn*Www@QuestionHome@Com

boring!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Hi!",

It's like that, when you have a mental breakdown!.
Very well written!.

WELL DONE! : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

quite a work day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Note to Michael: That was my reaction when I read YOUR 'poem'!.Www@QuestionHome@Com